Peer Review

20221 junghosoo

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
This essay deserves a two point five. Good idea

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
The research needs to improve, and be careful not to commit grammer error. Do your best.

Thesis
What is the thesis?
Advertisements aimed at children should be banned.

Is the thesis clear and debatable?
Good.

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
I will write it more specifically, I mean the thesis.

Any other thoughts?
Just be careful to follow the format according to the teacher's recommendation. It will do. 

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?


Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 


Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?


Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?


Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 


What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 


When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree withe thesis?


If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?


How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?


Research
Is the author using research effectively? 


Is the research from appropriate sources?


Are the sources obvious?


Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?


Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?